<Pony> <WiP> <Speedcore> Hooves Up High (ExoBassTix Remix)

[ExoBassTix]

This is a work-in-progress preview of one of my two entries for Rainbow & Rooted. Before you listen to it, bear in mind that it's not finished, and that it's Speedcore. Mwahaha!

http://www.soundcloud.com/exobasstix/hooves-up-high-remix

I wonder if anyone knows how to critizise this, but I would still like to ask you if you could try. Oh, and please keep it constructive. Just in case.

[hackd]

ssssspeeeeeeedcorrrrrrre <3 <3 <3

I'm just going to focus on composition and not tonality; I get that it's a WIP.

Firstly, you need to raise the volume on the pad stabs at 0:09 and 0:19. Also, I would recommend doubling the note lengths and throwing a kick in at their beginning.

You do a great job rhythmically in the first half with the variation and extratone bits (0:14). But when you speed up into the second break, I would really like to hear a straight up machine gun line with crash cymbals and screeches. The staggered machine gun breaks sound a little out of place given the short nature of the WIP. They would work at the end of the track since they showcase the total breakdown of structure, just they sound a little overdone.

Main things you need to do:
- incorporate vocal stabs throughout the main verse
- develop a harmonic backbone to the main riff

I'm really interested to see where this track goes.

[ExoBassTix]

ssssspeeeeeeedcorrrrrrre <3 <3 <3

Yay ^-^

I'm just going to focus on composition and not tonality; I get that it's a WIP.
Firstly, you need to raise the volume on the pad stabs at 0:09 and 0:19.

Fully agreeing on this.

Also, I would recommend doubling the note lengths and throwing a kick in at their beginning.

Could you please elaborate this further? I fail to understand.

You do a great job rhythmically in the first half with the variation and extratone bits (0:14). But when you speed up into the second break, I would really like to hear a straight up machine gun line with crash cymbals and screeches.

Thanks! This sounds pretty good, I've not yet had the chance to do this (time...) and I do indeed really wanna do that. Thanks for this part.

The staggered machine gun breaks sound a little out of place given the short nature of the WIP. They would work at the end of the track since they showcase the total breakdown of structure, just they sound a little overdone.

Yea, I know it sounds a bit weird, but I do agree, and just know that I do intend to make this part the outro, only then I'm going to extend it a little, so it doesn't end abruptly (really, almostly all awesome Speedcore and faster Industrial Hardcore tracks fail on the outro part, for example).

Main things you need to do:
- incorporate vocal stabs throughout the main verse
- develop a harmonic backbone to the main riff

Underlined - the "GO" shouts are there. I'll look at this though.
Bold - yes sir! Already busy with that.

I'm really interested to see where this track goes.

Thank you. Me too

[hackd]

What I mean by lengthening the pads is like... you shouldn't rush them (that's how they sound as stabs)? If you drag them out to fill a full bar, you'll get this cool trancy, in-flight anchor before falling back into the driving kicks. I imagine those will act as the backbone of the melodic element.

I think the "Go!" chants are good for like part one of the main verse, but in the second part you should add some vocal splices of the "Here we go again!" sample. Like "go - go - go go - here we - go go go- again" throughout the main beat.

Hope that helps.

[ExoBassTix]

Sure does! Thanks a million.