[Original][Pony-inspired]Baby Steps (cake twins tribute)

[Ohffy]

this was my first song i ever made and i thought it would be cool if i re-did it

http://soundcloud.com/ohffy/baby-steps-wip

still a work in progress so send me that delicious criticism

[Element6]

I like it! That drum pattern is tons of fun. Cake twins music is entirely too uncommon as well, so that's cool.
If I were to suggest anything, it would have to be that maybe you could fade away those (I think they're called breakbeat?) drums completely at some point in the middle, really focusing on those nice sounding synths for a time while maybe even introducing new sounds, only to reintroduce the drums near the end for a sense of finality and impact. Somewhat more of a consistent flow with the drums is what I think will help. That point near the end could be called the high point of the song, I suppose. It might sound nice, or it might not, but I think it would be worth experimenting with. I'm not exactly an expert with advice though!
Regardless, very nice work. I truly enjoyed it. I want to redo my very first song too, once I'm better at this music thing. :)

[Ohffy]

I like it! That drum pattern is tons of fun. Cake twins music is entirely too uncommon as well, so that's cool.
If I were to suggest anything, it would have to be that maybe you could fade away those (I think they're called breakbeat?) drums completely at some point in the middle, really focusing on those nice sounding synths for a time while maybe even introducing new sounds, only to reintroduce the drums near the end for a sense of finality and impact. Somewhat more of a consistent flow with the drums is what I think will help.

WOW thanks man feels good to know im doing something right
Ill definently see about implementing what you said into the song thanks for the feedback!