<Original> Moon's Elegy

[Belgerum]

Based off this Fanfic, which you should read if you haven't already. Really good stuff here.
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/19198/Background-Pony

I tried to get a militant feeling here, due to the context, but I'm wondering if anyone here has any feedback or constructive criticism for me? I'd really appreciate any I get.