{WIP} First Song draft 2! (Looking for critiques and advice)

[Dabrenn]

Here I am again, After tons of procrastinating and the like, I have added something to my song.

This may be the last I do to it in terms of adding any new patterns because I'm a little tired of it.

I'm still looking to learn what I can from here so I welcome all critiques with open arms! Thanks everyone who takes the time to listen to it.

I personally think the main thing holding my track back is the drums, They kind of suck and are boring and repetitive.

Also, Ever since i added the second wobble progression, I almost want to totally scrap the first one and the intro.

It's also got some weird peaks and stuff since I know next to nothing and mastering and slapping a limiter on my master channel I think makes the track feel a lot weaker.

But yeah, here it is and thanks everyone :D

This is on Ableton btw

I may Ponify it in the future as practice for vocal edits.

Just force your way through the intro haha :D

http://soundcloud.com/dabrenn/rd-2

[silverblaze]

Wow! This is actually really good, I'm really getting into the first section. and those drums! *drools*

wubwubwubwubwuuubwuuubwubwub....

Other than that, could use a bit more melody. the second half is getting the right idea, but is still lacking in the melody section.

Great track! Keep up the awesome work!

[Dabrenn]

Wow! This is actually really good, I'm really getting into the first section. and those drums! *drools*

wubwubwubwubwuuubwuuubwubwub....

Thanks for the Compliment! It really means a ton to me ha.

Strange that you like the drums, It seems the part I like the least. Maybe they just need more variation, not necessarily different sounds.

Other than that, could use a bit more melody. the second half is getting the right idea, but is still lacking in the melody section.

Great track! Keep up the awesome work!

Definitely will keep that in mind. It does get pretty repetitive.

[Sugarholik]

It's also got some weird peaks and stuff since I know next to nothing and mastering and slapping a limiter on my master channel I think makes the track feel a lot weaker.

Let's fix that!

If you put a limiter on master channel, you shouldn't notice anything. If you do you're doing something wrong. First put a compressor on master channel, then a limiter. Limiter is just for catching the peaks that compressor lets through. Compressor is the gadget for making it loud. If you have no idea how to use it just tell me and I'll do my best to explain it's secrets.

For the repetitiveness you could for example try arranging the beat so that it is a bit different every other bar. And maybe move from one part to next a bit more faster. And listen to what silverblaze said...

[Dabrenn]

It's also got some weird peaks and stuff since I know next to nothing and mastering and slapping a limiter on my master channel I think makes the track feel a lot weaker.

Let's fix that!

If you put a limiter on master channel, you shouldn't notice anything. If you do you're doing something wrong. First put a compressor on master channel, then a limiter. Limiter is just for catching the peaks that compressor lets through. Compressor is the gadget for making it loud. If you have no idea how to use it just tell me and I'll do my best to explain it's secrets.

Ok, will do. When I put the Limiter on, the drums seemed to stick out less, maybe it was just my imagination.

For the repetitiveness you could for example try arranging the beat so that it is a bit different every other bar. And maybe move from one part to next a bit more faster. And listen to what silverblaze said..

when you say the "beat", do you mean the percussion only?


Once again, thanks for the advice!

[Sugarholik]

when you say the "beat", do you mean the percussion only?

yup.

[Dabrenn]

when you say the "beat", do you mean the percussion only?

yup.

Alright. I'll try to do that some more.


I need to find some good shaker, hats, and clap samples since I do not have any really. Roght now all the drums are is a kick hat snare hat kick hat snare hat pattern which gets pretty old.