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[Nine Volt]

Here's what I was doing for six hours yesterday.

https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/956 ... 232013.mp3
This one opened to a player for me so try it. And I updated it to a public link, so it should work

Feedback would be extremely appreciated, and I'm willing to offer feedback for your own song if you give me sufficiently detailed feedback (ie something besides something like "cool song bro" (and now someone will say just that and be like "just kidding ;)" or whatever just because I said not to say it)).

[Injustrial]

I'm having trouble with your second link. Could you update it with the public link, so I can stream the song rather than download it? Winamp is acting up for me here...

[Nine Volt]

I'm having trouble with your second link. Could you update it with the public link, so I can stream the song rather than download it? Winamp is acting up for me here...

Fixed, I think.

okay nvm, lemme just rename the file real quick

there we go, should be fixed now.

[Injustrial]

I think your ride could do with a different sample. It doesn't seem to fit with the rest of the drums. Could just be me, I'm having issues with cymbals myself, so don't take that too seriously.

I'm also hearing something with your lead, when the beat goes silent. It sounds like the tempo slows down towards the end. Was that deliberate on your behalf, or an artifact? It yanks me out of the rhythm, making the song hard to follow.

Some variation later down the line would be welcome. You've got the same melody going on through almost the entire song. When it comes to basslines, I'm completely cool with that, but the leads should do something interesting from time to time. Maybe write a couple more, add in an extras synth, automate some cutoff filters or something?

It's a WIP, so I'm guessing there's a lot of stuff getting changed down the line. The melody coming in at 2:30 is very Pirates of the Caribbean'y and a welcome change of pace. But perhaps a different synth would be better for that line? Just throwing ideas here, really.

The chip arpeggio was cool, but too short, and perhaps coming in a bit late? A small section earlier would let me remember it when it returns after a buildup, giving me a reason to really start dancing.

It's very upbeat and summer'y, something I could see myself listening to, while grabbing a beer in the park. I'll be interested to see where it's going

[Nine Volt]

Thanks for the feedback, I'll be sure to fix those issues. I'll probably update this sometime within the week or start a new thread if this one has been dead long enough, though given my track record recently I might not even get these things done for awhile.

Also, by 'ride' did you mean the crash cymbal or one of the various percussive instruments?

[Injustrial]

My bad. It's the hihat. The open-to-closed sound there. Rhythm's cool, I'm just not too fond of the sound itself