Come and make fun of this thing

[SpicyHax]

I made this WIP for *idk* i guess to test my own ability.

No idea what genre. *I guess its like some sort of Grunge/speedcore/Heavy Electro thing* Since i lack all the musicial language n stuff im just going to say this.

What did I do wrong?

Note: This is actually a WIP for a Bioshock/Pony parody mini EP because apparently that combo sounded swell at the time.

I dont care if you insult me and my musicial ability.

https://soundcloud.com/haxyarchive/wip-for-ponyshock-1

You if you actually do like it. I still wouldnt recommend following my soundcloud if you're feeling charitable, I'll only be uploading WIPs there.

[KillerAmp]

1. Wrong section, but I don't mind, just for future refrence I'd put wips in the Music section not the Technique section.
2. The sounds could use some processing, its really quite like, almost blunt noise that's really harsh to the ear, maybe adding some sidechain on the beat or adding some sub or a cutoff filter to get rid of some really high stuff
3. Melodically its got potential, but i cant really tell much with the sounds that are fighting for frequency space

Hope im not too harsh, its not my intention :S

[SpicyHax]

Hopefully someone can move my thread..
Errm. comments were probably harsh but I didn't expect anything else.

Dislike using cutoff filters. makes it too soft.
My ears must be like, solid steel.
*Melodic noise*