by DrSorkenstein » 19 Apr 2012 14:15
The intro is waaay too long. It doesn't build up at all towards the next section and sounds a bit bare with only the plucky synth in there. The notes don't sound like they are part of a scale which sounds very wierd to my ears. The section at 1.12 is a lot more interesting than the intro but again the notes you've chosen sound odd to me.
Shorten the intro and add some drums, build it up towards the next section, confine the notes to a scale and finally just add more stuff.