Ohai. You probably notice this is my first post; it's okay, I frequent the forums, I just haven't gotten around to making an account until now. Quick into, I'm JayBrown and I have that one fic on EquestriaDaily. You know, the one just after the Twilight/Alicorn news so that nobody knows about it? Yeah. A Life Worth Living would be the name. Now, onto the main course.
I've mostly written another story, probably going to simply be named after the protagonist or his online moniker. The idea is a brony musician that made a wrong choice and threw away his college fund in hopes of pursuing music, despite never taking the chances he got to make money. I'm still not certain about things like names or the character's job in the story, as I needed to change them because I apparently guessed MicTheMicrophone's name AND his damn job.
Anyway, what I'm asking for is legitimate review. My last fic barely got any, but it was better written than this one. I don't feel right judging my own work, so I want some help here. If you choose to help, then thanks! If you don't, but you still read this far, thanks!
Here you go, if you want it: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1-Dr ... sp=sharing