<Pony><Original>Syztem-Reunion(Shooting Stars)

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<Pony><Original>Syztem-Reunion(Shooting Stars)

Postby StormSyztem » 30 Dec 2012 03:40

https://soundcloud.com/syztem-dubstep/reunion-shooting-stars

Intended for Toastbeard ER308, but it was too late to submit. I set out trying to rustle some feels with this, and I ended up being quite satisfied with the Leaving Earth kinda tone I got.
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Re: <Pony><Original>Syztem-Reunion(Shooting Stars)

Postby vladnuke » 30 Dec 2012 03:56

Yo, change it up a little, shit should be all swooping and moving, it should be a journey through a field, not an ass-sitting contest on a rock. Like, every 4 bars, do something new, make a melody, don't leave me hanging bro. I can't really comment past that cause there's not mich to say, you're playing it way too safe. At least make the loop a bit longer, gimme more to bite on.
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Re: <Pony><Original>Syztem-Reunion(Shooting Stars)

Postby StormSyztem » 30 Dec 2012 13:35

vladnuke wrote:Yo, change it up a little, shit should be all swooping and moving, it should be a journey through a field, not an ass-sitting contest on a rock. Like, every 4 bars, do something new, make a melody, don't leave me hanging bro. I can't really comment past that cause there's not mich to say, you're playing it way too safe. At least make the loop a bit longer, gimme more to bite on.


I definitely see where you're coming from, hah, I was too hesitant to add to it cause I thought it might either get washed away in the buildup or detract from it.

Speaking of, should I remove the build and make it more swooping and moving? It does wash out the second piano I'm using to add melody...

I'm adding to it right now though, so cheers for pointing that out, I should've been more confident to add to it ^^
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Re: <Pony><Original>Syztem-Reunion(Shooting Stars)

Postby vladnuke » 30 Dec 2012 19:13

Yeah, piano is pretty nice to build melodies with, just make sure to add those extra elements.
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