Great visuals! But there were a few things I personally would have changed: -The song doesn't follow any particular key, and just sounds discordant and grating. -The lead is too flat. And also off key. And it's a bit boring. - The vocal samples still have music attached to them. -The tombsnare just plain cuts off, no release at all -The bass has no low end and is also grating. -It's not very well mixed. -You kinda just repeated the same drop twice
So to recap, you should work on: sound design, structure, theory, and mixing. But the visuals were nice! And the idea of the song was ok!