<WIP> Not sure where to go with this.

[ThatRobChap]

http://soundcloud.com/robskean/some-unfinished-stuff

I could put vocals on it - I've been meaning to work on my singing for a while now.
How's it sounding so far?

[Sugarholik]

The lead in the beginning is kinda boring. Use something brighter like saw or square and colour it a bit with FM or distortion or something. And add reverb to it!

0:52 add maybe palm muted guitars, or some reese bass synth. There's too little going on.

2:00 check your levels. Seems to be somewhat clipping or hits the limiter too hard.

3:20 Maybe add some lower strings like cello and maybe some bass too.

If you can, do the vocals as well! This totally has potential, nice job.

[ThatRobChap]

Thanks, man. I'll start on that stuff now.

[ThatRobChap]

http://soundcloud.com/robskean/some-unfinished-stuff-update

Changed the intro lead synth, sorted the levels to some extent, added something to the bit where there wasn't enough going on, and added a cello (which seems to be sounding a bit off for some reason, I'll try and fix that.)