<pony><original> The Royal Canterlot Wobble

[TheDnBGremlin]

First ever pony song, enjoy

Would like critique as this will most likely end up on an album

http://soundcloud.com/the-dnb-gremlin/the-royal-canterlot-wobble

[Ed Viper]

Mmm work on your mastering a bit, I can't hear the drums well when the bass kicks in at 1:08, which is definitely a problem in a DnB song.

Also work on the drum loop you made, it seems a bit...off? Your kick hits seem a bit too close together at some points, in my opinion.

Other than that, I like the melodies. Keep it up!

[vladnuke]

Mixing(Don't ignore this):
For DnB, the drums should be way more punchy and distinct, the kick and snare really need to pop. The bass could use a little cleaning up, either make it harder (sausage fattener it) or clearer (take off a little distortion). Leaving it in the middle kinda sounds muddy. It also sounds really quiet for DnB. Samples either need to be clearer or more distorted. The mix needs a little improvement, make sure to put a little more into EQing everything.

Composition(Ignore if you wish):
It's quite flat. More variation on the arps and drums. More melody. More unique samples. That's about it.

Everything else is pretty nice. The flow is good, but the package is lacking. The overall delivery, albeit lacking, is unique. Everything I just laid out does not require major change, except the composition, but that's only if you want to (read: that's what I would do).

[TheDnBGremlin]

Also work on the drum loop you made, it seems a bit...off? Your kick hits seem a bit too close together at some points, in my opinion.

Weird, I spaced it evenly with the exception of the kick-snare in succession.

Mixing(Don't ignore this):
For DnB, the drums should be way more punchy and distinct, the kick and snare really need to pop. The bass could use a little cleaning up, either make it harder (sausage fattener it) or clearer (take off a little distortion). Leaving it in the middle kinda sounds muddy. It also sounds really quiet for DnB. Samples either need to be clearer or more distorted. The mix needs a little improvement, make sure to put a little more into EQing everything.

This. And I brickwall compressed my drums but I'll boost the gain.

[Ed Viper]

Also work on the drum loop you made, it seems a bit...off? Your kick hits seem a bit too close together at some points, in my opinion.

Weird, I spaced it evenly with the exception of the kick-snare in succession.

Yeah, that's what I was talking about. It seems a little off-sync with the tempo to me.

[Freewave]

good recommendations i have to agree with them. avoid some of the repetition and get those samples clearer sounding.