<nonpony><Original> Beef

[TheSlendid]

Hello everyone, I was asking where I should post this to get feedback, and was directed here once again by PhillyPu. So yah, my first track ever. I am incredibly proud of it, but it's no where near what I want. Gotta make more, gotta get better.

http://soundcloud.com/theslendid/beef

[Interrobang Pie]

Bump.

[PhillyPu]

WHY DID NO ONE LISTEN TO THIS SONG. IT'S SO AWESOME.

[Makkon]

Dude, this is legit. You have a great range of sound, it's very full.

[DrSorkenstein]

The only problem I find is that it ends a bit abrupt cutting off the reverb and making a slightly annoying pop. Agree with everything above though!

[soup2504]

Fucking yes. Just yes. YES. OH MY GOD. DUDE. YES.

YES!

[Whitetail]

Sounds pretty neat, actually reminds me of Terraria's soundtrack a bit.
Only things I'd comment on:
-It sounds a bit unguided, like you go for a bit and went "well that sounded cool, let's do something else" - the ending is a pretty big example of this. You should try and develop your ideas more, a song should flow into itself and evolve. Honestly I'd either take the ending out as a different song or at least try to make the transition be a bit smoother, like have the drum line slowly buildup to the similar progression like it has in the end.

-Bass movement :3 - as your first song getting used to the "rules" of music per say is tough so I'm not going to be too hard on you for sticking with the same degree the whole time, but for future songs I'd suggest making the bass move up and down, give it a progression - progressions help drive music and make it sound more interesting.

For someone who just started music I have to say your development sound-wise is pretty solid, the sounds themselves definitely work I just think the composition could use a little more work.

Keep it up dude!

[Overkillius]

I agree with Whitetail!

Also, most all good music has some kind of idea that is used throughout various parts of the song that kind of connects it all. Usually some repeated rhythm and or melodic idea.

If you want me to go a lot more into detail on anything except for sound design, I'm always on skype! Just send me a PM.

[TheSlendid]

The only problem I find is that it ends a bit abrupt cutting off the reverb and making a slightly annoying pop. Agree with everything above though!

Yah, the ending was probably the part I worked on the least. I really wanted to finish it so badly that I didn't put too much thought into it. I won't make that mistake again!

Sounds pretty neat, actually reminds me of Terraria's soundtrack a bit.
Only things I'd comment on:
-It sounds a bit unguided, like you go for a bit and went "well that sounded cool, let's do something else" - the ending is a pretty big example of this. You should try and develop your ideas more, a song should flow into itself and evolve. Honestly I'd either take the ending out as a different song or at least try to make the transition be a bit smoother, like have the drum line slowly buildup to the similar progression like it has in the end.

-Bass movement :3 - as your first song getting used to the "rules" of music per say is tough so I'm not going to be too hard on you for sticking with the same degree the whole time, but for future songs I'd suggest making the bass move up and down, give it a progression - progressions help drive music and make it sound more interesting.

For someone who just started music I have to say your development sound-wise is pretty solid, the sounds themselves definitely work I just think the composition could use a little more work.

Keep it up dude!

-It sounds a bit unguided
I agree entirely, this track was mostly just one big experiment that actually went somewhere for once. Currently my technique for finding something to progress into is just trying random presets until I find something that sounds nice, then I just edit it to my liking. Probably a terrible way to go about that, but it's how I'm doing until I find a better way. I will take your advice and try to make the tune more fluid.


-Bass movement
Again, something I entirely agree on, the bass was overly simple and I probably should have deviated a bit more. I kinda got scared of fooling with the bass too much since I tend to work with it way too much to the point that it just sounds like another melody.


Thanks everyone so much for the awesome feedback! I honestly just thought this thread got buried until Overk told me people responded