Since everyone's posting their Balloon Party teasers, this is mine, but in a lyrical form. I appreciate any and all help/compliments/criticisms/death threats/trash directed at me and these lyrics. The song's supposed to be about the other side of a certain yellow pegasus we all know and love, Fluttershy. They're a work in progress and ever evolving and I need a second opinion. Here they are so far.
Weak and Helpless (Yeah Right)
Beneath that still, passive façade
Lies the heart of a slayer
The fires burning inside
You better say your prayers
I’m afraid to admit, but I must confess
That yellow Pegasus is far from being
Weak and helpless! (That’s what you’ll be)
She drove a dragon to tears
Before he left his home
Stared down a cockatrice
While he turned her to stone
Driven to rage, she exclaims this request
“You’re going to love me!” she made us
Weak and helpess!
Like I said, tell me anything that needs to be improved/is okay/taken out before this puppy dies a horrible, painful death. Keep in mind this song is supposed to be a style parody of Megadeth/early Metallica (Kill Em All/Ride the Lightning), so any tips on getting closer to that style would be of great help. I don't want this song to be, well, weak and helpless. xD Thanks again!