by GhostXb » 19 Feb 2015 17:25
I find the violin melody in the beginning hard to follow. It's too unpredictable. Pleasant music is predictable. You want to bring people in and make them comfortable, and then add twists to keep their interest. Once the piano chords at 0:20 kick in, it gives the violin some context and it becomes a little more bearable at that point. Maybe start with the chords and add the violin afterwards?
As for the overall composition. I feel a lot of the instruments are playing different songs. It sounds like you wrote melodies that sounded good independently, then put them together. When you write melodies, you want to write it with the song. Play the song and experiment on the keyboard, but while still listening to the song. The listener can only focus on so many things at once. Simplify things and introduce elements through progression. You want to focus the listeners attention, then add things that compliment what they are currently listening to, not competing with it.
I think 1:10 to 2:12 is the best part of the song. The instruments play a little better with each other and is more simple and easy to follow. Before and after that things get a little too messy.
One more tip. I heard your original unmastered WIP. Its WAY TOO LOUD! Make sure your not making the song at a high volume. Bring each instruments volume down as you add them to the project so your not starting out too loud. Its easier to make something loud later then it is to make something quite later. You want to give yourself room to work.
Hope that helps, and good luck.