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Re: Review the track(s) above you

Postby Glitchhog » 17 Sep 2013 06:52

itroitnyah wrote:Also, any reason the name "strobe"? I can't really understand the lyrics, haha, but deadmau5 has a pretty famous song also called "strobe", just fyi.


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Re: Review the track(s) above you

Postby Nine Volt » 17 Sep 2013 12:46

Glitchhog wrote:
itroitnyah wrote:Also, any reason the name "strobe"? I can't really understand the lyrics, haha, but deadmau5 has a pretty famous song also called "strobe", just fyi.


Strobe is my artist name, the song's title is 'Noveuron'. Cheers for the feedback!

To be honest, Noveuron is a much better artist name than Strobe. Mostly because there are literally dozens of artists going by that exact same name and hundreds going by some variant of it (yeah I know you usually write it > Strobe < but that's not better). And the songs named that as well, like deadmau5's aforementioned one. No offense.
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Re: Review the track(s) above you

Postby Glitchhog » 18 Sep 2013 06:43

Nine Volt wrote:
Glitchhog wrote:
itroitnyah wrote:Also, any reason the name "strobe"? I can't really understand the lyrics, haha, but deadmau5 has a pretty famous song also called "strobe", just fyi.


Strobe is my artist name, the song's title is 'Noveuron'. Cheers for the feedback!

To be honest, Noveuron is a much better artist name than Strobe. Mostly because there are literally dozens of artists going by that exact same name and hundreds going by some variant of it (yeah I know you usually write it > Strobe < but that's not better). And the songs named that as well, like deadmau5's aforementioned one. No offense.


I feel it's a bit late to change my name now. And the song is called Noveuron, not Strobe.
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Re: Review the track(s) above you

Postby Nine Volt » 18 Sep 2013 09:45

Glitchhog wrote:
Nine Volt wrote:
Glitchhog wrote:Strobe is my artist name, the song's title is 'Noveuron'. Cheers for the feedback!

To be honest, Noveuron is a much better artist name than Strobe. Mostly because there are literally dozens of artists going by that exact same name and hundreds going by some variant of it (yeah I know you usually write it > Strobe < but that's not better). And the songs named that as well, like deadmau5's aforementioned one. No offense.


I feel it's a bit late to change my name now. And the song is called Noveuron, not Strobe.

It's never too late to change your name. Snoop Dogg did it, deadmau5 went by "Halcyon441" for some time, etc. Just a suggestion though, obviously you could completely ignore that.

Don't get me wrong, I enjoyed the song though. And yeah I knew it was named Noveuron. Just pointing out the songs with that name as well.
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Re: Review the track(s) above you

Postby itroitnyah » 18 Sep 2013 14:33

Wonderful, now that that problem is resolved, would anybody mind critiquing the track I posted? If you need another link: Image
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Re: Review the track(s) above you

Postby Totalspark » 29 Sep 2013 00:27

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I love the chord structure you used in the WIP, but in it, you use a snare that seems to come out above the other sounds a bit, and I would say to just bring its volume back a little bit. Otherwise, I quite enjoyed it! It's really chill.

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Re: Review the track(s) above you

Postby Dr. Plague » 29 Sep 2013 20:34


The high-end on your bass sounds like it's kind of drowning out the other synths. Maybe tone that down a bit? Idk if you specifically didn't want your drums in the foreground or not, but your kicks are basically entirely drowned out through most of the song, too, so maybe bring those out a bit more. If you only wanted them there to subtly drive the beat (which isn't bad or wrong by any means), then you might want to still turn it up a bit for some parts of the song.

itroitnyah wrote:Image


Initially, having the chords hit on the off-beat threw me off, but that may just be me. It grew on me and felt normal as the song went on.

I have to disagree with Totalspark on the snare. I like it just where it is. It's nice and crisp without being too overbearing at all. Well, that might be a hat you have playing with the snare, idk, but either way, sounds good to me.

The drum roll at 2:30 sounded a little out of place imo, though. Was a bit harder than the overall tone of the song.

Again, all just my opinions. I really liked the melody's progression and the slight dissonance of the chords. Your percussion is top notch too.

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I enjoyed the melody a bit, and the song overall wasn't too bad. I'm not really a fan of prog house and especially not that style of vocals (well, outside of gothic metal, anyway), so I don't have much to say. Mixing and mastering seems top notch, though, good job with that.

I hope that's going far enough back for reviews, especially considering how long I haven't posted here.

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I think it gets a little crowded at some points, but that may be due to my mixing (or just too much stereo separation on some synths)? Idk, still working on getting that down. All feedback is definitely appreciated.
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Re: Review the track(s) above you

Postby itroitnyah » 03 Oct 2013 18:16

Dr. Plague wrote:Initially, having the chords hit on the off-beat threw me off, but that may just be me. It grew on me and felt normal as the song went on.
What? no. If you check the structuring, it's hitting on the on-beat.
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Re: Review the track(s) above you

Postby Stakeout Punch » 03 Oct 2013 19:31

@Dr. Plague
Nice song. TBH I think it would make good BGM for racing/hi-tech styled games. It seems a little repetitive and I couldn't catch an obvious melody (Which is why I almost immediately thought of BGM). It's just a damn groovy track I can jam to while drifting and otherwise shredding tires, or while flying around in space shooting lasers at anything and everything. I can't critique mixing or anything of that catagory because I am on laptop speakers.

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Re: Review the track(s) above you

Postby Dr. Plague » 04 Oct 2013 00:38

itroitnyah wrote:
Dr. Plague wrote:Initially, having the chords hit on the off-beat threw me off, but that may just be me. It grew on me and felt normal as the song went on.
What? no. If you check the structuring, it's hitting on the on-beat.

Oh, my bad, lol.

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I like it all, but that first drop comes out of nowhere. It could definitely use with a little more build-up. Maybe it's just my personal taste, but I feel like you had the drums going a little harder than the mood of the song, but it didn't take away from the song at all. Just my personal two cents.

I don't know the original song, so idk how much you varied on the original melody and all, but if you did, great job. If not, well, great job with the song anyway! Great mixing and mastering, too, imo.

Overall, definitely enjoyed it! Great song.

Here's a short track I worked on for the past two or three days. Started out wanting to make it something hardstyle but kind of moved away from that to disco house... but then I also liked the original intro, so now it's just kind of wonky.

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Re: Review the track(s) above you

Postby Thunder Dash » 04 Oct 2013 22:01

@ Dr Plague

Alright the first thing that really got my attention was that synth at the begining right after the reverberated laugh. There's just something about that synth that bothers me. It feels as if it needs a little reverb, it feels too dry. But the sweeping pads that follow after are pretty sweet. Also, I really liked that d&b fake-out you put in there. I really thought it was gonna end up being a drum and bass song. Nice going on that.

The vocal effect is just downright awesome. How'd you do that? I'd love to know. The synths on top of it blended in really nicely.

The slowdown around the 1 minute mark was well placed, it gave a nice sense of change of feel to the music while mantaining the same mood.

Overall, it was a very well crafted piece. Bravo!


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Re: Review the track(s) above you

Postby Dr. Plague » 05 Oct 2013 12:28


Kick could be a little higher in the mix, but as I said before to Totalspark, if you were only having it there to help drive the beat rather than be the main force of the beat, then it's fine where it is.

I don't know how else to put it other than "the mastering could be better," but that's literally the only issue I find with this. Beautiful, man, that was just great. Pretty epic (in the literal sense of the word).
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Re: Review the track(s) above you

Postby KillerAmp » 07 Oct 2013 22:31

@dr. Plague
for Kitsunetsuki
most nitpicky thing i could really say is that some of your synths seem really dry and there's silence between the notes in the melodies for those synths. Personally i find that to be rather irritating while listening, but to each his own haha. Your melody creation is coming along nicely, and i guess a little work on the mixing is due, i cant pinpoint exactly what it was that caught my attention since im using my semibad headphones right now, but I'll see if i can get back to you on that later haha.

Here's my track errybodie
https://soundcloud.com/officialaristokat/end-an-order-of-fries
only about 15-30 min of work on it, so im sure the mixing and stuff isnt too superb, but i'd love some opinions regardless!

[UPDATE] changed the link to the newest version of the track
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Re: Review the track(s) above you

Postby Dr. Plague » 07 Oct 2013 23:19

KillerAmp wrote:@dr. Plague
for Kitsunetsuki
most nitpicky thing i could really say is that some of your synths seem really dry and there's silence between the notes in the melodies for those synths. Personally i find that to be rather irritating while listening, but to each his own haha. Your melody creation is coming along nicely, and i guess a little work on the mixing is due, i cant pinpoint exactly what it was that caught my attention since im using my semibad headphones right now, but I'll see if i can get back to you on that later haha.

Yeah, I wanna say mixing (and "spicing up" my synths) better is something I need to work on more. Thanks for that feedback! I'd definitely appreciate more specifics if you find the time to do that. (Doing that via PM is fine by me if it's fine by you.)

Here's my track errybodie
https://soundcloud.com/officialaristokat/end-01
only about 15-30 min of work on it, so im sure the mixing and stuff isnt too superb, but i'd love some opinions regardless!

I clicked play and moved off the tab, and I wish I could explain in words how disappointed I was when it cut off at the end. Great melody and build-up going, definitely looking forward to hearing the rest when you do more.

Your lead might do with a tad less reverb (at least on the low end), but that might just be me. Or is that maybe another synth? It's hard for me to judge things just by ear without muh spectrograph.

Well, that's all I really have. Fixed the mistake of not following you yet. Be sure to post more WIPs of that!
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Re: Review the track(s) above you

Postby KillerAmp » 08 Oct 2013 12:25

Haha thanks man every one of my followers mean a lot to me!
Yeah there are some things im itching to fix once i get outta school.
i hear ya on the reverb issue, ive been listening to it between classes, shits muddy as hell and too wet so im totally gonna have to fix that, most likely im gonna mess wiyh octaves of everything and give it a really ambient intro, kinda Strobe-esque
so yeah ill see how much of that i can get done tonight :D
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Re: Review the track(s) above you

Postby Dr. Plague » 11 Oct 2013 23:53

Jokeblue wrote:Ok, something about the intro from 3-10 seconds in kind of annoys me,

Yeah, I was a bit lazy with the intro but just decided fuggit.


Oh shit, metal! My best friend before I got into EDM~!

The only issue that really strikes me is in your drumbeat, right at the start, it sounds like you have two kicks one after another real fast, but something about it bothers me. I can't really tell if it's the kicks or maybe part of the bassline, but yeah, it just seems slightly out of tempo or something.

Also, during the acoustic outro part, idk, something about the guitars going 4x4 for that melody is irking me. Maybe I'm just used to it being a bit more varied in metal.

Other than those minor details, I really liked that, dude, awesome!
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Re: Review the track(s) above you

Postby simonli2575 » 12 Oct 2013 01:26

Nice to see that this thread is finally coming back alive.
Might find a chance to review someone's song later.
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Re: Review the track(s) above you

Postby Dr. Plague » 13 Oct 2013 00:55

Jokeblue wrote:Do you have any idea's on how I could make it a little more varied?

Couldn't help you with anything music theory. I'm still learning that and just rely on the "randomly place notes until the melody sounds good" technique.

What do you mean '4x4' with the guitars? Is it the splitting, having the lower part on the left with the higher version on the right?
Like following a... shit, idk how else to put it other than 4x4. Instead of using 1/6 or 1/3 notes, just going with 1/4, 1/2, etc.
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Re: Review the track(s) above you

Postby Dr. Plague » 14 Oct 2013 13:18

Jokeblue wrote:Oh, so you mean the note values? I think I get it, like how I'm using straight quavers most the time?

Or do you mean the time signature? Like how I'm using just a normal 4|4 time sig?

YES
TIME SIGNATURE
that's the phrase I was looking for
just straight up 4/4 with the acoustic sounds off, is all
maybe throw a 3/4 or 6/4 (OH GOD I HOPE I WROTE THAT RIGHT) arpeggio in there, maybe?
that's just me, though
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Re: Review the track(s) above you

Postby KillerAmp » 17 Oct 2013 14:01

haha funny you should mention music theory,
I studied it for 2 years in school, and I know it really well, and ill be honest, It didn't really help me personally with writing melodies/chords/ect. For the most part my music just feels and vibes, randomly putting in what i hear in my head haha

I guess i just know how my music should sound *shrug*
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Re: Review the track(s) above you

Postby itroitnyah » 22 Oct 2013 18:53

Jokeblue's metal track

I know that you posted this a while ago, but I'm supposed to review a track before I link to mine.

Is there a kick in your WIP? Because I can't hear it. Might want to turn it up. The hats could also use a bit of turning up, imo. That part is really up to opinion though.

The song is also very very repetitive. It sounds like I'm listening to the same measures over and over again.

To go along with the mixing, it sounds almost like there's an instrument underneath the distorted electric guitar thingy merjiggy. Like a bass guitar or something. If there's actually a bass guitar there, it's so quiet I can't hear it at all. You'll want to turn it up definitely.

Also, I don't see how the song relates to Applejack not learning anything (reference to that one episode of mlp, I know). It really sounds a lot more like you were throwing down chords and melodies and stuff and having a blast making it then dropped pony on it for the sake of pony. Unless you just have some pony samples you're going to throw in, I'd drop the pony thing and just keep it as a regular song.
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Re: Review the track(s) above you

Postby itroitnyah » 22 Oct 2013 18:56

Oh, and I completely forgot to link to my track. I would appreciate getting this reviewed: link

I just finished putting on a lot of mixing, and I'm having trouble with deciding whether it's pretty complete, or whether I'm hearing muddiness in the ~300Hz range. I'm pretty content with everything else, it's mostly just the muddiness part, although it you notice anything that sounds/is off, feel free to tell me.
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Re: Review the track(s) above you

Postby Conduit » 22 Oct 2013 20:52

itroitnyah wrote:Oh, and I completely forgot to link to my track. I would appreciate getting this reviewed: link

I just finished putting on a lot of mixing, and I'm having trouble with deciding whether it's pretty complete, or whether I'm hearing muddiness in the ~300Hz range. I'm pretty content with everything else, it's mostly just the muddiness part, although it you notice anything that sounds/is off, feel free to tell me.


It was pretty nice up until the dubstep wobble thing. It honestly hurts to listen too, and has no context in the song. It feels like you just put it there to say it was dubstep. Sound design is the biggest flaw with the song, all the sounds are really basic, and it would be nice to see some variation, or more complex leads. Composition wise it's nice as simple as is, so good job if that's what your going for, but IMO some more interesting melodic content would be nice.
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Re: Review the track(s) above you

Postby itroitnyah » 23 Oct 2013 06:02

stuff about my wobble bass
It does feel somewhat out of place to me as well, but I wanted to include a bass that wasn't just the hoover saw-bass-thingy that I used for the majority of the drop. I'm debating either dropping it or recomposing it, or working on transitions so that it sounds more like it belongs. Or something.
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Re: Review the track(s) above you

Postby KillerAmp » 24 Oct 2013 01:18

@itroitnyah
The production of the track is good, and I like the ideas you have going, but i think you should play with some inversions on the chords, they just feel a bit static/generic to me, but that might just be my ear. The dubstep part doesn't really work for me because the drums arn't strong enough to keep you feeling the track. Perhaps a more chillstep approach would work more? (heavy sidechain on more gradual bass sounds) I just think that way you can have the best of both worlds, a more melodic feel to a dubstepy track.

Idk if that helps all too much haha.

@jokeblue
So for your track I'm really loving the premise of the guitar, and its powerful but its also not too much. The distortion on it was just the right amount to work with the chord/melody/arp you were playing, so I like that. From what you've posted I also like that more chill part near the end and really think that it will turn out to be a good song.
Now the only real downside to this track in my own opinion, is the lack of the mixing for the drums, throughout the WIP the drums kind of come in and out depending on how busy the guitar part is, and it starts to lose its unity as a part of the track. I think the best thing I can really say for this is to try EQing out the un-necessary frequencies of the guitar part in order to let the drums breathe a bit more.

So I have 2 small works in progress I'd love opinions on so I critiqued 2 songs, is that how this works? am I breaking some rule? idk. They're short don't worry :P

https://soundcloud.com/officialaristokat/what-we-were-v2
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