<wip><pony><remix><Aggrotech> This Day Aria (3ternal Remix)

[3ternal]

https://soundcloud.com/3ternalmusic/3ternal-this-day-aria-wip

I've been in a HUGE aggrotech mood recently, so I decided to give it a shot. So far, I'm really happy with how this has turned out, but I figured I'd post a clip here in hopes of getting feedback.

[Injustrial]

Heheeey, Aggrotech! You should check out my stuff ;) (Not self-promoting at all)

But seriously, this is pretty cool. A few things I might point at:

Stuff I didn't like:
- The vocals might be a bit too loud in the mix. I can hardly hear the instrumental when it's going
- The vocals might have a bit of a bleary distortion to them. You're using Ohmicide or something? The tail of the distortion is eating up the next words, which makes for a very unclear sound. Yes, we do love distortion, but this might be a bit too much.
- The pitch shift in your vocals might mess with you a bit. From what I can understand, you're using too much "voice" when you could have used more "air" in the vocals. Too much real "voice" and your vocals will start to sound bubbly and drowning. It depends on whether or not you're going for that though, so that's just my opinion.
- The instrumental sounds a bit too heavy-handed in the leads. Perhaps lower them a bit. The distortion used does make them very sharp, cutting through everything else like a like butterknife

Stuff I like:
- Your sounds are cool! You're giving me a very oldschool vibe with the distorted lead and choice of drums.
- The use of different snares is very effective and provides a nice change of pace in an else wise monotone song.
- The bitcrusher distortion on your first line of vocals are sick! Especially at 0:40, where you're nailing the use of your voice in context with the effects.
- The bassline is a classic aggrotech line. Nothing wrong with reusing standards, when it sounds genuine. Like a mix between Wumpscut in sound and older Aesthetic Perfection in progression.

All in all I like this a lot. I would have liked a bridge or something inbetween two parts (maybe the one you didn't cover?) and a changeup in melody right at "No I do not love the groom." As a WIP, I find this very promising indeed!

[3ternal]

Thank you VERY much. This is exactly the feedback I'm looking for!

[Injustrial]

NP, man. Aggrotech and Industrial is my thing

[Injustrial]

Just to give you some pointers about vocals:

This is my latest song, and I think my best vocal performance so far:



Here's the vocals of the chorus with no effetcs: https://dl-web.dropbox.com/get/Vocal%20No%20Effects.wav?_subject_uid=239906056&w=AADOyuCgvSVdvRdoWWfr1MGHt_H7t_eeB-M7q-EHmZCAbA

And here's a screencap of the effects used on the vocals.

The effect order is: Limiter (compressor mode), Pitch shifter (Notice how the fine and grain dials are neutral) EQ, Blood overdrive (Soft distortion), Reeverb, Limiter (Brick wall expansion)

Spoiler Huge Image:

I see you've got the hissing parts done right. I'm thinking you lack a bit of power, to give off that threatening vibe. Try doing the Marge Simpson voice and scream it really hoarsely. (Sounds ridiculous, works like a charm)

Of course, you have your own voice and your own ideas, so don't feel you have to copy me. (In fact, don't do it at all. Your own style is what differentiates you from others) I just remember having a hell of a time figuring out how to get the vocals I wanted, so I thought I'd save you the trouble

[ExoBassTix]

Oh man, Josh, you even managed to get Injustrial to compare your stuff to Aesthetic Perfection!
Really man, nice diddly darn good job!

[Injustrial]

Oh man, Josh, you even managed to get Injustrial to compare your stuff to Aesthetic Perfection!
Really man, nice diddly darn good job!

That intro bass really reminds of this:


EDIT: Wrong video xD