<Original> <Pony> <Horrorcore Rap> The Ballad Of Pinkamena

[Natas_blackmane]

This is a new horrorcore Rap song i made about Pinkamena with the awesome joe making the backing track and mastering it this is deff one of my best songs ever XD i hope you all like.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=eQQSWomd-EA

[Da Mane]

Kind of HU-esque with the scream/growl delivery and electric guitar beat. The instrumental is pretty ill so props to whoever was on the produkts. Using more syllables would have made the flow less choppy and also, there were a few problems with pronunciation. (Like when you said 'veil' like 'veal'.)

I heard a couple of nice internal rhymes, but you were really lacking multisyllabics there. I'm not really gonna go much into rhymes schemes though, since I'm assuming you don't do rap all that much and that more complicated rhyme schemes are still a pretty foreign concept to you.

Anyway, nice Grimdark track fam. You have a good voice for that aggressive type shit.

[Mr.Afrox]

impressive usage of the instrument,well mastered and beautifully accomplished keep going!