[Original][pony] Octavia's Rap

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[Original][pony] Octavia's Rap

Postby Eros » 23 Dec 2012 23:08

This is my first hip-hop type of song.
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Re: [Original][pony] Octavia's Rap

Postby Sonarch » 24 Dec 2012 00:55

Not bad! You gonna add vocals to this?
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Re: [Original][pony] Octavia's Rap

Postby Eros » 24 Dec 2012 01:19

Sonarch wrote:Not bad! You gonna add vocals to this?


I may. Idk
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Re: [Original][pony] Octavia's Rap

Postby itroitnyah » 24 Dec 2012 08:40

The main violin that kicks in at around 0:22 is really overpowering, it drowns out the kick, clash, and snare. Speaking of kicks, your kick that you layered with the clash and... trumpets? Anyways, the kick sounds pretty weak, or you didn't mix it very well. The lead violin also drowns out the cello. And the snare is sorta awkwardly placed. And the buildup before the lead violin is a bit weak. Overall, it's repetitive, and the chorus parts where the lead violin kicks in, the melody for the violin sounds a bit awkward.

Also, putting "Rap" in the title would imply that there is somebody rapping to the beat, and there is not. It would be much better if you did not include "Rap" in the title until you actually get somebody to rap to the beat.
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