[wip][non-pony][original] Chiptune idea

[BinaryBludgeon]

I was working on this for quite some time, and I was wondering if I could get some honest critique on it, as I've received mainly nothing but praise for it...

This is my first chiptune, and I feel like there's some important element I'm missing, or something I'm doing too much of, and I want to try and make it as good as it can be. All critique is accepted, and I'd also really appreciate it.

Preamble aside, here's the link for it, if anyone wants to listen
https://dl.dropbox.com/u/11219554/stuff%209.wav

[BinaryBludgeon]

OH CRAP wrong board.

[Lavender_Harmony]

Np, moved!