<wip> <original> Second Song - Need Suggestions

[Quix]

Hey everyone, thanks for listening! This is my second song, and I need some suggestions and flaws pointed out in order to improve the track. And I need a title. My mind is absolutely blank right now.

EDIT: Changed the second synth and the end.

http://soundcloud.com/quix117/wip5

[Ed Viper]

I like it! At least as good as anything I make, if not better.

I don't really have a whole lot of criticisms on this, as I am bad at music. It is perhaps a little short. Just keep working on it for a few days, maybe take a break for a day and come back to it with a fresh eye. Perhaps you'll see something you didn't before.

As for names, I'm also terrible at them. Sorry 'bout that.

[DannyMirage]

Pretty good for your second song.

It's really repetitive though and the part where it's just synth doesn't fit well.
Like I said though that's really good for your second song. My second song was made in Audacity and maybe LMMS, it sounds terrible, even worse than my first song.

"Robot Factory" came into mind...
Sounds like a song you would hear as robots are being put together by larger robots.

[LoreRD]

Sounds good! Clean and distinctive, but it ends kinda abruptly and the last part (past 1:20) sounds a bit too similar (imo) to the first part. Maybe add a different melody with a different synth?

As for a title..... Assembly Line? (Like DannyMirage) It sounds a bit factory-ish.

[Quix]

Thanks for the feedback, everyone! Yeah, I'd definitely agree that it's quite repetitive after 1:20. I'll try to improve the ending and a few other things.

I like Assembly Line a lot! I think I'll use that title.

[LoreRD]

I like Assembly Line a lot! I think I'll use that title.

Glad you liked it

For a second song, this is really quite good