<non-pony><original><wip> gravyman - make me

[gravyman]

http://soundcloud.com/gravyman/gravyman-make-me-wip

Hi y'all, I'm back here again since i feel this is the only place where i can get some honest and good feedback. I began working on this track last week but accidentally ended up in the hospital for a few days. So finally when I came back home two days ago I could work with some of the ideas i came up with during my stay in the hospital.

Hopefully you guys will enjoy it, I'm quite satisfied so far. Just a few fixes here and there, and with some input I think this might be my best track yet.

[Sugarholik]

ended up in the hospital for a few days.

Oh snap! But you'll live, right?

Have some input:
Pay attention to 0:30ish: the bass 'snaps' quite disturbingly, give it some attack time.
1:45 ----> :Something is consuming way too much headroom. Hear how the kick ducks everything?
3:00: somehow things sound odd from here on... Can't put my finger on it though.

[gravyman]

ended up in the hospital for a few days.

Oh snap! But you'll live, right?

Yeah, I'll live. Just broke my ankle and a few toes. Moar time for production!

Have some input:
Pay attention to 0:30ish: the bass 'snaps' quite disturbingly, give it some attack time.
1:45 ----> :Something is consuming way too much headroom. Hear how the kick ducks everything?
3:00: somehow things sound odd from here on... Can't put my finger on it though.

Yoap, that's the parts that i thought needed to get some work done. Good to hear someone else pointing it out, makes me want to fix it right away! Thanks for listening!

[gravyman]

/bump

Sorry for the bump, I'm thankfull for every view but I felt like atleast trying to get some more replies.

[LoreRD]

I like it, but in my opinion it repeats a little too much. The riff is really good, but the track feels like it's missing the vocals or needs some additional melody to keep it interesting.

[SwissArmyCheese]

I like it!

I can't critique much, But I do like how it's written!

It's got a nice four on the floor with good structure. It is a very solid song, Good job!

Love the bassline by the way.