<Pony><Remix><dubstep> "Beyond Her Garden" Orig. by Glaze

[HoztileManikyn]

Hope you enjoy! :)

(the Youtube embedder is derping out on me, so here's the link)
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pM1I3C4 ... e=youtu.be (Dead Link)

[Injustrial]

Thjere's something very wrong with your notes and it sounds really out of key. I enjoy some dissonant chords at times, but this is sounding like a jumbled mess to me

[HoztileManikyn]

I don't see how that is, i used the exact same key as in the original, in fact, everything is the same, i just just chopped it of, and used different instruments

[Injustrial]

I think it might be the detune on your synths. Not sure, though. Someone else could probably pinpoint this better than me

[Totalspark]

Injustrial is right, your key is a whole step above on everything.

[HoztileManikyn]

Oh ok, i think i fixed it,
hold on a bit

[HoztileManikyn]

Ok , how's this? the melodies are a whole step lower than before
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=kWNDSiuDtKE (Dead link)

[Injustrial]

Still pretty harsh. Think you could post a MIDI file or something?

[Freewave]

You really need to be able to hear when a track is horribly out of pitch or key. It's one of the basics of being a musician and is almost something that you shouldn't even need to be taught. Listen to the original, play what you have, and try to find out what you did so wrong. Probably start from scratch ....

[HoztileManikyn]

Okay, I fixed the melodies, reworking the mix, and maybe the song structure ...

[HoztileManikyn]

Okay, I spent more time on it, and I believe I have made improvements....
https://soundcloud.com/hoztil/beyond-her-garden-hoztile-takeover


(I hope this clarifies some things)

[Injustrial]

Your leads aren't in key with your bass and you might have made it even worse this time around, with the unnaturally low pitch.

I'd suggest going as far as scrapping everything, starting from complete scratch and making something else. It's clear that this just isn't working out for you

[Totalspark]

I would recommend looking into learning basic music theory. It'll help you out in the long run.

[NightmareRare]

Well.. Good concept but your low/mid end is crowded like a subway, chorus was good but the over abundance of clashing signals and harmonic dissidents before hand really lowerd your impact.