First "thing" ever! Constructive Criticism please?

[CrimsonEpilogue]

I've been working on this for a while? What do you ponies think?
http://soundcloud.com/crimsonepilogue/my-little-wip

Also, what should I name it?

[Facade]

name it the thing it fits perfectly
reminds me of my first song you can jump anywhere and here almost the same thing over and over again i would work on not being repetitive
all in all not bad for a first "thing"

[CrimsonEpilogue]

Thanks, I'll work on my repetitiousness.

[Facade]

i had some trouble with that too what i do is make a chorus verse 1 and two then i place em like this
chorus verse chorus verse2
basically work off of that change the order if you want just make it different if you know what i mean

[GreenFlyingFish]

Sometimes I tell myself, "something different every 4 measures." and "never repeat the same 4 measure part unless you make it %20 cooler." I think we all were repetitious when we first started working in a sequence based environment. It lulls you into a false sense of satisfaction to cut and paste or use patterns.