<house><nonpony>Weapon of Mass Creation

[Nine Volt]

I made a house guys. A dirt. Freakin'. House.
https://soundcloud.com/nine-volt/weapon-of-mass-creation-free

I think this would be electro house. Not sure.

Also, snow days seem to be the only days I get anything done, because this was made all today :/
My brain must be used to actually having to do stuff during the times I'm supposed to be in school.

[Twy]

Alright I'mma write down my thoughts as I listen (also obligatory 'this is just my opinion and may not reflect a fully objective or critical point of view and I'm not even good at music so take it all with a grain of salt blah blah blah tidal wave')

0:00 I feel like the lead synth is a bit too harsh for the kind of upbeat melody you've got going on. A bit sawwave-y for me. Same with the pad at about 0:16.

0:45 Soundin good. I like the kick and the new synth, though the pad from before sounds a bit out of place, again 'cause of the harshness I think.

1:15 I've got no problems with this breakdown, except for interspersed the kick drum. It feels a bit distracting; perhaps lowering the volume for this section and/or giving some reverb would help.

2:00 I think the sidechained cymbal hiss is a bit loud.

2:30 Another breakdown, which is fine, but seems a bit unnecessary since we only had the beat for a good 30 seconds before this breakdown, so I don't think anyone would be fatigued of that yet. Especially sense the in yo face wubs remain into this section as well, which is presumably one thing you'd want a breakdown to give people a break from.

3:45: The way the wub synth fades out sounds a bit weird to me. I think it might sound more natural to simply have it disappear under the "swoooooosh" cymbal fade thing when the intro synth comes back. I dunno.

So yeh, them's my thoughts. Sounds good aside from those little issues, I thought. Hopefully this can prove to be useful to you in someway or another, even though it's not the most in depth analysis out there.
Keep up the good work.

[Nine Volt]

Alright I'mma write down my thoughts as I listen (also obligatory 'this is just my opinion and may not reflect a fully objective or critical point of view and I'm not even good at music so take it all with a grain of salt blah blah blah tidal wave')

0:00 I feel like the lead synth is a bit too harsh for the kind of upbeat melody you've got going on. A bit sawwave-y for me. Same with the pad at about 0:16.

0:45 Soundin good. I like the kick and the new synth, though the pad from before sounds a bit out of place, again 'cause of the harshness I think.

1:15 I've got no problems with this breakdown, except for interspersed the kick drum. It feels a bit distracting; perhaps lowering the volume for this section and/or giving some reverb would help.

2:00 I think the sidechained cymbal hiss is a bit loud.

2:30 Another breakdown, which is fine, but seems a bit unnecessary since we only had the beat for a good 30 seconds before this breakdown, so I don't think anyone would be fatigued of that yet. Especially sense the in yo face wubs remain into this section as well, which is presumably one thing you'd want a breakdown to give people a break from.

3:45: The way the wub synth fades out sounds a bit weird to me. I think it might sound more natural to simply have it disappear under the "swoooooosh" cymbal fade thing when the intro synth comes back. I dunno.

So yeh, them's my thoughts. Sounds good aside from those little issues, I thought. Hopefully this can prove to be useful to you in someway or another, even though it's not the most in depth analysis out there.
Keep up the good work.

Alrighty, thanks :3

The beginning pluck is actually squares though :3

I actually made a second version, based on (i think) itroitnyah's critique of a certain bass. I don't know if I made it better or worse. Oh yeah and I fixed some of the issues you pointed out.
https://soundcloud.com/nine-volt/weapon-of-mass-creation-second

[Twy]

No problem. :3

Ah, well please excuse me then. I'm pretty bad at timbre. :33

Nice. Sounds good. I think it flows a bit better in the new one, although I actually liked the wub wub wub bass in the other one more, personally, hah. That's just me, though.

Listening to it again I don't mind the squarewave synth anymore either. Just goes to show how reliable I am for feedback, I guess.

But yes, good work.