<original> Twilight

[SliZe]

My first pony related song (about time now!), which I released 2 days ago.

Part 1 (Dawn):
https://soundcloud.com/slize/twilight-dawn

Part 2 (Dusk):
https://soundcloud.com/slize/twilight-dusk



Feedback had been awesome!
-SliZe

[Nine Volt]

Pretty nice piano in the first one, not really my style but it's nice.

As for the second one, I've got a bit of (hopefully) constructive criticism:

First off, the drums are kinda weak. The kick should have more 'presence' in the mix, right now it seems weak. The snare too, sounds thin and relatively powerless. You've got the snap down pat, now you just need the body. Perhaps boosting 200hz or so or maybe sidechaining your synths (lightly) to the snare to give it more presence. You may want to layer another snare under it to get that nice punchy effect.

The mid-range wobbles are too quiet, they lack power. I can barely even hear a sub underneath them. It gets a tad repetitive too, try changing up your hat patterns more and adding more variation and different sounds during your drops, especially near the end.

Lastly, your buildups are practically nonexistent. While a minimalistic style buildup is fine, it isn't executed well here. Try adding some risers, white noise, reverse cymbals, etc to make your buildups have more power. The transitions in general are fairly weak in my opinion, for dubstep at least. Try not to have the exact same buildup twice in the song either.

You've got the potential for a good track here, don't get me wrong. It's a good start

[SliZe]

Pretty nice piano in the first one, not really my style but it's nice.

As for the second one, I've got a bit of (hopefully) constructive criticism:

First off, the drums are kinda weak. The kick should have more 'presence' in the mix, right now it seems weak. The snare too, sounds thin and relatively powerless. You've got the snap down pat, now you just need the body. Perhaps boosting 200hz or so or maybe sidechaining your synths (lightly) to the snare to give it more presence. You may want to layer another snare under it to get that nice punchy effect.

The mid-range wobbles are too quiet, they lack power. I can barely even hear a sub underneath them. It gets a tad repetitive too, try changing up your hat patterns more and adding more variation and different sounds during your drops, especially near the end.

Lastly, your buildups are practically nonexistent. While a minimalistic style buildup is fine, it isn't executed well here. Try adding some risers, white noise, reverse cymbals, etc to make your buildups have more power. The transitions in general are fairly weak in my opinion, for dubstep at least. Try not to have the exact same buildup twice in the song either.

You've got the potential for a good track here, don't get me wrong. It's a good start

Thanks, I'll keep an eye out for stuff like this on my next track.

Also, about the sub: Did you say you could barely hear it, because I can hear it quite well on my speakers (KRK Rokit 5s).

[Nine Volt]

Pretty nice piano in the first one, not really my style but it's nice.

As for the second one, I've got a bit of (hopefully) constructive criticism:

First off, the drums are kinda weak. The kick should have more 'presence' in the mix, right now it seems weak. The snare too, sounds thin and relatively powerless. You've got the snap down pat, now you just need the body. Perhaps boosting 200hz or so or maybe sidechaining your synths (lightly) to the snare to give it more presence. You may want to layer another snare under it to get that nice punchy effect.

The mid-range wobbles are too quiet, they lack power. I can barely even hear a sub underneath them. It gets a tad repetitive too, try changing up your hat patterns more and adding more variation and different sounds during your drops, especially near the end.

Lastly, your buildups are practically nonexistent. While a minimalistic style buildup is fine, it isn't executed well here. Try adding some risers, white noise, reverse cymbals, etc to make your buildups have more power. The transitions in general are fairly weak in my opinion, for dubstep at least. Try not to have the exact same buildup twice in the song either.

You've got the potential for a good track here, don't get me wrong. It's a good start

Thanks, I'll keep an eye out for stuff like this on my next track.

Also, about the sub: Did you say you could barely hear it, because I can hear it quite well on my speakers (KRK Rokit 5s).

Listening again, I can hear it quite clearly. I don't know what I was thinking earlier :3