ahaha you coudnt spel remix!?!? ahahaha FALE!
(hope you see the irony in my sad little joke)

but on a more seriuse note, this soundssss...... okayish. to be honest i do like this one a lot better than the original song you were renixing. (ok ok I'm sorry i had to do that. i will stop now)

you put more instruments in and broke it up so that its not the same exact thing playin over and over again for 32 measures.
but its hard for me to say what is really bothering me because it is also present in the original song as well. the notes. the progressions are kinda off and the notes dont seem to fit too well. kinda hard to fix in a remix because you are remixing something that is already a little off. soo yeahhh..... hope this kinda helps?? but it is good. just needs some cleanin' up to do.