<pony><original><wip> Broken Wings

[colortwelve]

One day, when I was walking home rather than taking the bus, the melody played by the guitar in the second half of this track just popped into my head and started floating around, begging for me to do something with it.

And this is what I did with it. My vocalist is working on something to cover the first half and make it less boring. But I wanted to see if anyone had any ideas, comments, criticism, etc. Anything that might make it a bit better. Or a lot better.

http://soundcloud.com/colortwelve/broken-wings-new-mixdown

[the4thImpulse]

When you bring the kick in at :20 I think it would be good to experiment with sidechaining on the synth thats playing to give it more a pumping/head noding feeling. The pad at 1:21 sounds a little distorted and abrupt when it first comes in, but it does sound quite lovely as it plays out. There is some more clipping at 2:16 (might be my headphones but check that out). The guitar is a little too loud at first I think you should fade it in more, but it has a great tone and the melody is awesome. Good track so far, I think it needs a little work with the mixing and then it will be golden