<pony><wip><original> The Yellow Fish - Improvement?

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Okay, so me and my mate are currently working on this song. Randomly enough called "The yellow Fish" (....). And this is our wip. SO can somepony tell us something we can do to improve it?

We're kinda tryin' to join the Balloon Party. So please tell if it needs to be harder. Moar wubs. Deeper things. Moar hardcore stuff. Idunno. ANYTHING http://soundcloud.com/ruk4/the-yellow-fish-ruk4-wip