<liquiddnb><noponi><orginal>the wash

[Berri]

this is a little expriement into dnb i made.
https://soundcloud.com/theberri/berri-the-wash
feedback is appriecated and thanks for your time

[CaptainFluffatun]

In short,


I'm deeply sorry that your song didn't get the feedback every song should get due to being overshadowed by a mean potato chip. I'll offer mine, if that makes up for it.

At the :57 mark when the bass starts coming in, it just kinda makes the mix more chaotic. Make VERY sure that you are leaving room for it with EQ. You're also going to want to (subtlely/transparently) sidechain your bass to your kick, so that the bass ducks when the kick hits. This will remove any dissonance between the kick and the bass. Don't go overboard, we're not making house. Compositionally, the song sounds fairly repetitive. It seems like you're only using one progression throughout its entirety. I really recommend composing some different parts, even if that requires more work and thought. Right now your song feels very loop-oriented, which is bad because it makes the song feel a little lazy. Approaching the last main section the song has, it definitely sounds like the EQ comment I made was correct. Use a spectrum analyzer and find the exact frequency the thump of your kick is at. This is usually at around 60-120 hz, depending on where you want the kick to be emphasized (and also where your bass falls in the mix). Lastly, there's no real defining melody to me for this song. A strong melody will help a song both stand out and be remembered, so it's never a bad idea to aim for that, no matter what genre you're working in (unless that genre is ambient music).

I encourage other people to chime in on account of this thread being assaulted by a fucking potato chip.

[Guthey]

Yes, Indeed Captain has pretty much summed up what happened in that picture, and if you weren't here to witness it, then you have certainly been saved a glorious hour and the gods smiled upon you today.

As for your song, I would say that the intro seems a little bland, the pads and chorus are nice, but they don't really have any defined flow. At :57 I would boost that bass up a little, I can barely hear it. At 1:19 you might want to check your mixing because the in DnB the drums should be the main and focused element, usually, in the track, whereas in this the break-beat pattern seems to be what everything is revolving around. The interlude is pretty nice, but again, I feel like bass and mixing of the drums could use a little work. The drums themselves sound more like a thumb than an actual Kick and snare, if there are any. Maybe you could take off any sort of filter on them and EQ around the 60-100 and 500-1000 hrz range. The ending seems a little strange, maybe you could fade it instead of just picking up the reverb and ending it like that. Basically, you just have to work on your mixing, you kind of seem to have structure down, but I don't know too much about DnB to say much, in fact I think Seamless just did a video on how he mixed and mastered his Drumstep/DnB song, maybe you should check that out for ideas and the awesomest of knowledge.

And may that potato chip be no more

[CaptainFluffatun]

Oh yeah, I meant to comment on the ending as well. Sorry, a bit distracted :p I agree with what Guthey said. My problem with it that it's too sudden, and honestly really jarring to the ears. If you wanted to have a reverb swell, make sure you also turn down the dry amount as you turn up the wet. I would also recommend letting the reverb tail linger for a while. There is a thing where people get scared of audio slowly getting louder, and I didn't really understand that until I heard the ending to this song. Unless, scaring your audience is the goal, in which case you have succeeded. If you want to make it more natural to the ears, try the above suggestions, or work in a different ending.