Hmm, I'm not sure about where the Industrial parts come into play. This sounds more orchestral to me. I might be wrong, so feel free to explain this to me (use simple language, please)
Your percussion is very well made. Are they synthetic or samples? The smacky, airy hits and nice buildups help drive the track and makes it sound very dramatic.
Speaking of dramatic, your choir parts are perfectly composed, but perhaps they could be a smidge higher? Usually when I hear big movie-like scores like this, the choirs are higher in the mix. Your call, though.
There's not really anything I'm able top point at here and critique. I love it. Big, dramatic and wondrous. I want to grab my friends and traverse the world, escape from enemies and discover new land.
Great job!