<Original> First Flight (Finn)

[X-Trav]

This is my gift for the Secret Santa over at tumblr. I tried to imitate Owl City as best I could, (you can still here my usual dramatic orchestral style in there) the only thing I hate is my voice. Oh well! Any feedback is greatly appreciated.



Edit: Lyrics


In the fields a young colt stood, with all the wood and stems.
He scanned the air, it's just not fair, why can't he soar like them?
Curious smiles can't hold a proper altitude.
But within his whole, lies needed aptitude.

Soar high, don't cry.
It's in you, just try.

Finn, take to the sky.
Spread your tiny wings and you will fly.
They may be small but you won't fall,
your heart is bigger than them all!

In the fields a young colt tries, to get up off the ground
with each new flap he starts to rise, and gently glides around
every time he fails, he gets back up again
his wings may be frail, but he won't yet complain

Soar high, don't cry.
It's in you, just try.

Finn, take to the sky.
Spread your tiny wings and you will fly.
They may be small but you won't fall,
your heart is bigger than them all!

Through the sky, a young colt flies, within the clouds and air.
Conquered the trail, he wears a smile, because He's finally there.

[Freewave]

Overall that turned out pretty good. You spent a bit of time on the vocal effects but the vocals can be a little low in the mix (but otherwise production wise they hold up well for a song). There's also a few times the drums were a little too much cymbals crashing. That said those are minor critiques and this did a good job overall for an original song. Well done.

[Senator Myth]

Wow, this is lovely! I agree that the vocals seem a bit subpar, but it's lovely all the same. Some parts they sound really amazing some parts they sound very very off... So maybe you just need more practice with mixing and processing them! I don't think it's a problem with your actual singing, which I rather liked.

[TheSunAndTheRainfall]

This is rather lovely! Like everyone else said, I'd like the vocals to stand out more; you did a good job on them! And I think you channeled Owl City pretty effectively. If anything, to drive the point home a little further, I think the song could benefit from a different percussion pattern, perhaps something more frantic and fast paced would suit it better. Otherwise it's a pretty lovely song. c:

[Triple_B]

This was a very nice listen. I don't really have anything else to say that wasn't already pointed out.

[Solarsail]

Love this. Your voice worked well.