Help with Rapping verse in drumstep (Feedback please?)

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Help with Rapping verse in drumstep (Feedback please?)

Postby Nexaka » 26 Jul 2012 12:10

Hey, I tried rapping in one of my songs, but I'm not sure how good it is or if its worthy of being on this beat. I usually just make the beats (such as the actual song that I'm rapping to), but I was in need of a rapper so I tried it myself, please tell me what you think and what I can improve. I really have no idea how to make this better.
http://soundcloud.com/nexaka/party-in-the-stars-remix


Here are the lyrics for reference:

YOU GOTTA GET LOUDER
GOTTA GET PROUDER
ALL THESE HATERS GONNA TRY TO GET MORE POWER
CANT LET EM WIN CANT HIT THE SHOWERS
WE GOTTA JUST FIGHT TILL THEY ALL TURN SOUR

BUT VIOLENCE ISNT THE ANSWER, GOTTA USE PEACE
LOVE AND TOLERANCE, THATS WHAT WE, THE BRONIES, SPEAK
ARE BODIES AND MINDS ARE MORE IN TUNE THAN AVERAGE
BUT THEY MUST KNOW WE'RE NOT EVIL NOR ARE WE SAVAGE

SO ALL MY BRONIES AND PEGASISTERS
LISTEN PLEASE!
WE GOTTA LEARN TO NOT TO FRONT AND NOT TO SCREAM
THEM HATERS ARE GONNA HATE NO MATTER WHAT WE DO
WHETER ITS COSPLAY, MAKING MUSIC, OR DITZY DO

WE GOTTA STICK TOGETHER BECAUSE WE'RE A TEAM
WE'RE GONNA PARTY IN THE STARS, YEAH, THATS THE DREAM
WE GOTTA MAKE IT REAL
WE GOTTA MAKE EM FEEL
WE GOTTA SEAL THE DEAL SO OUR REP IS STEEL
Dubstep = Earth Pony
Electro House = Unicorn
Drum & Bass = Pegasus
~Choose Wisely~
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