by AJYoung » 25 Feb 2016 15:01
I first thing I notice is that it sounds like the vocal samples aren't in the same key as the rest of your song. Composition wise seems alright so far other than that.
Next, mixing needs work. A lot of work. Right now every part is trying to be the loudest all at the same time. Not good. Choose one or two parts/instruments for the listener to focus on and have them be the main elements.
It also sounds like this is smashed and heavily distorted. Might want to check your master track for clipping/distortion.