by Thunder Dash » 21 Jul 2015 20:45
This was...an ok listen...
The one thing that this piece lacks is variance. You were basically stuck in the tonic key of c minor, which can be a big turn-off when it comes to electronic music. The least that could've been done was to hit the III chord, which is the relative major chord to the minor key you're in. In this case, it is E flat Major. Because your piece had 8-phrase sections (a phrase equaling 4 beats), it had a great amount of potential. The big mistake that was made was keeping the boundaries to c minor and c minor only.
Here are some progression suggestions. The hyphens represent the beats or how long the chord will last
Cm----Cm----EbM----Fm--Eb--Cm----
Cm----EbM----Fm----GM--F7--Cm----
In terms of the intro and outro, the intro could've started in a filter. This means that you turn up the envelope filter in your settings all the way up. At the beginning of the 5th phrase, you can start to sweep it out slowly. For a faster sweep, you can wait and start it in the 7th phrase. This way, you can lead in to the quote you placed in...speaking of the quotes...
Some of them were not quite necessary, especially the last two. Usually, when a quote is played, the music either dims or rises in intensity. However, it stayed the same, which is a big no-no. I suggest only using 2 quotes. If you're going to use 3, you will have adjust dynamics of the piece. You may have to sweep it into a filter after a quote, and to prepare for the final quote, sweep it out of the filter.
In terms of the content of the quotes, I suggest you put the quote "I am the Iron Pony!" for the first quote. For the second, when you change dynamics, you should put a more softer quote, meaning not as intense as the first. The second quote you chose doesn't really go with the piece. "Oh you wanna do this the hard way? We'll do this the hard way!" is a quote that's more suitable for a rock/metal song. It doesn't really go with the overall attitude of this piece. Maybe the quote where Rainbow goes "Kazzam!" can go better because the music will sweep into the filter, getting soft. For the final quote, you can put the clip where Rainbow goes "Awwww yeah!" Or simply, wait until the music has faded and then put the quote that I suggested just now.
Overall, this piece has a ton of potential. I just feel that it hardly was used. Keep at it and you'll get better over time!