<Pony><Remix><dubstep> "Beyond Her Garden" Orig. by Glaze

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<Pony><Remix><dubstep> "Beyond Her Garden" Orig. by Glaze

Postby HoztileManikyn » 27 Dec 2014 05:02

Hope you enjoy! :) :grin: :ugeek:
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https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pM1I3C4 ... e=youtu.be (Dead Link)
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Re: <Pony><Remix><dubstep> "Beyond Her Garden" Orig. by Glaz

Postby Injustrial » 27 Dec 2014 09:25

Thjere's something very wrong with your notes and it sounds really out of key. I enjoy some dissonant chords at times, but this is sounding like a jumbled mess to me
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Re: <Pony><Remix><dubstep> "Beyond Her Garden" Orig. by Glaz

Postby HoztileManikyn » 27 Dec 2014 09:33

I don't see how that is, i used the exact same key as in the original, in fact, everything is the same, i just just chopped it of, and used different instruments
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Re: <Pony><Remix><dubstep> "Beyond Her Garden" Orig. by Glaz

Postby Injustrial » 27 Dec 2014 09:47

I think it might be the detune on your synths. Not sure, though. Someone else could probably pinpoint this better than me
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Re: <Pony><Remix><dubstep> "Beyond Her Garden" Orig. by Glaz

Postby Totalspark » 27 Dec 2014 13:50

Injustrial is right, your key is a whole step above on everything.
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Re: <Pony><Remix><dubstep> "Beyond Her Garden" Orig. by Glaz

Postby HoztileManikyn » 27 Dec 2014 18:42

Oh ok, i think i fixed it,
hold on a bit
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Re: <Pony><Remix><dubstep> "Beyond Her Garden" Orig. by Glaz

Postby HoztileManikyn » 28 Dec 2014 02:32

Ok , how's this? the melodies are a whole step lower than before
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=kWNDSiuDtKE (Dead link)
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Re: <Pony><Remix><dubstep> "Beyond Her Garden" Orig. by Glaz

Postby Injustrial » 28 Dec 2014 12:05

Still pretty harsh. Think you could post a MIDI file or something?
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Re: <Pony><Remix><dubstep> "Beyond Her Garden" Orig. by Glaz

Postby Freewave » 28 Dec 2014 14:43

You really need to be able to hear when a track is horribly out of pitch or key. It's one of the basics of being a musician and is almost something that you shouldn't even need to be taught. Listen to the original, play what you have, and try to find out what you did so wrong. Probably start from scratch ....
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Re: <Pony><Remix><dubstep> "Beyond Her Garden" Orig. by Glaz

Postby HoztileManikyn » 02 Jan 2015 05:11

Okay, I fixed the melodies, reworking the mix, and maybe the song structure ...
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Re: <Pony><Remix><dubstep> "Beyond Her Garden" Orig. by Glaz

Postby HoztileManikyn » 04 Jan 2015 05:51

Okay, I spent more time on it, and I believe I have made improvements....
https://soundcloud.com/hoztil/beyond-her-garden-hoztile-takeover


(I hope this clarifies some things)
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Re: <Pony><Remix><dubstep> "Beyond Her Garden" Orig. by Glaz

Postby Injustrial » 05 Jan 2015 03:55

Your leads aren't in key with your bass and you might have made it even worse this time around, with the unnaturally low pitch.

I'd suggest going as far as scrapping everything, starting from complete scratch and making something else. It's clear that this just isn't working out for you
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Re: <Pony><Remix><dubstep> "Beyond Her Garden" Orig. by Glaz

Postby Totalspark » 07 Jan 2015 23:47

I would recommend looking into learning basic music theory. It'll help you out in the long run.
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Re: <Pony><Remix><dubstep> "Beyond Her Garden" Orig. by Glaz

Postby NightmareRare » 09 Jan 2015 01:04

Well.. Good concept but your low/mid end is crowded like a subway, chorus was good but the over abundance of clashing signals and harmonic dissidents before hand really lowerd your impact.
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